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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #100 on: January 19, 2017, 06:11:25 PM »
Page 7

New stuff added to index.

Champion
 - Improved Daunting Challenge should specify what Willpower save it affects.

Tunnel Haunt
 - Skills have a weird line break, also you didn't list the key stats.
 - Tunnellurker needs either text on what happens if you break the invisibilty or up it to one of the better invisibility spells.

Goblin Diplomat
 - I'm not a fan of the capstone, it expects you to have 5 metamagic feats (2 pre-reqs + 3 extra for the capstone to apply to).

Amitok
 - Loyalty should let you adopt a family or something, right now it's useless for a lone Amitok but it is the pre-req for other feats.

Redeemer
 - Requires Versatility which is the capstone for Goblin Diplomat.  ?????

Tunnel Haunt cant upgrade to a higher level of invisibility

Unsure what to do about diplomat, thats still a pretty nasty capstone as I can't think of anything much better than being able to use metamagic normally.

Fixed other stuff

Versatility referred to theHalf Goblin Fighter sub level.  I renamed it Armored Versatility.

redid the shadow hop ability on bleak archer to piercing sight
« Last Edit: January 19, 2017, 06:19:46 PM by bhu »

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #101 on: January 19, 2017, 06:23:13 PM »
Tunnel Haunt
 - Add "or after [put time here] if you attacked while in an area of darkness or extreme shadow" at the end of the second sentence.

Diplomat
 - You're already getting that with Quicken and Still and Silence already though.  This prestige class is expecting you to use all of your feat slots on Metamagic feats.  Maybe grant three metamagic feats and the ability to use them normally?

Amitok
  -Loyalty feat has a typo in the word exiled.

Redeemer
 - You didn't rename Versatility in the pre-reqs.

Goblin index is done.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #102 on: January 19, 2017, 06:32:40 PM »
I has fixed.  Ready to take on the Kobolds?

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #103 on: January 19, 2017, 06:38:58 PM »
Your Orcs index should have the word index removed, and you can just remove the whole first line from the Giants index (the word index with a note).

Also, stop adding things to threads that I finished.  :P

Phew, that's all the big threads.

You want Kobolds next then?  I guess I can do that.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #104 on: January 20, 2017, 11:12:30 AM »
I see you're still adding things.  Let me know when you're ready (or I could move to a different thread if you have a lot more ideas)

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #105 on: January 20, 2017, 08:32:00 PM »
Im just adding races, which i do infrequently to the kobold thread.  I think all the classes are on page 1, which is ready to go.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #106 on: January 20, 2017, 09:18:25 PM »
Prestige Classes
Deathseeker (Page 1) [Crusader]
Forest Viper (Page 1) [Dragonfire Adept]
Gorgon Rancher (Page 1) [Any Martial]
Iron Kobold (Page 1) [Any Martial]
Kobold Bomber (Page 1) [Artificer
Kobold Gnome Whacker (Page 1) [Cleric]
Kobold Maintenance Man (Page 1) [Any]
Kobold Mama (Page 1) [Any]
Kobold Miner (Page 1) [Any]
Kobold Nibbler (Page 1) [Barbarian]
The Kobold Seductress (Page 1) [Any Arcane Spellcaster]
Kobold Swarmfighter (Page 1) [Any Martial]
Lil' Stabbity Kobold (Page 1) [Ninja/Rogue/ or Scout]
Mothers Against Dungeon Delvers (Page 1) [Any Spellcaster]
The Oompah Kobold (Page 1) [Bard]

Alternate Races
Agrutha (Page 1)
Alcor (Page 3)
Allura (Page 1)
Argas (Page 3)
Athasian Lizard Man (Page 1)
Babbler (Page 2)
Bakali (Page 2)
Cayma (Page 2)
Cayman (Page 2)
Chameleon Man (Page 2)
Cluu-rin (Page 3)
Crocodilian Brute (Page 2)
Crocodilian Master (Page 2)
Demarax (Page 2)
Dracon (Page 2)
Dray (Page 2)
Flailer (Page 2)
Gator Man (Page 2)
Gaund (Page 2)
Geckonid (Page 3)
Gurrash (Page 2)
Hurwaet / Swamp Wiggle / Salt Wiggle (Page 2)
Id Fiend (Page 3)
Iguanid (Page 3)
Ingundi (Page 3)
Jozhal (Page 3)
Kla'a-tah (Page 2)
Krolli (Page 2)
Marl (Page 2)
Shazak (Page 2)
Sis'Thik (Page 2)
Varanid (Page 3)

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #107 on: January 20, 2017, 09:18:36 PM »
MADD
 - Has Listen but not Spot.

Kobold Maintenance Man
 - The prereq feat link goes to a website that no longer exists

Seductress
 - Has Listen but not Spot.

Kobold Miner
 - Needs Profession as a class skill since it's a prereq.

Oompah Kobold
 - Has Listen but not Spot.

Gorgon Rancher
 - You can enter the class at level 9.  What happens if your effective level for animal companions is a negative number?
 - Why doesn't the class stack for animal companion?

Kobold Gnome Whacker
 - Prereqs have an empty feat line.

Gnome Whacker
 - The adding spells feature should say that you can get a spell of level x or lower.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #108 on: January 21, 2017, 07:36:26 PM »
I just noticed page 2 has some unfinished stuff.  Gimme a bit and I'll tell you when its ready.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #109 on: January 22, 2017, 11:28:51 AM »
Okay, I'll wait.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #110 on: January 23, 2017, 09:02:55 PM »
Had minor surgery today, will try to finish up tomorrow.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #111 on: January 23, 2017, 10:47:55 PM »
I hope you're doing alright.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #112 on: January 24, 2017, 07:18:27 PM »
Had some precautionary biopsies done, will proly be nothing.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #113 on: January 29, 2017, 05:27:57 PM »
okay i think it's mostly ready

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #114 on: January 30, 2017, 01:52:56 PM »
Ready for me to do page 2?

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #115 on: January 31, 2017, 12:03:28 AM »
yup

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #116 on: January 31, 2017, 12:39:10 PM »
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Babbler
 - Non-Humanoid Form has lots of extra spaces in front of it.

Chameleon Man
 - At-Will dimension door is way too strong for +1 LA, 2HD or not.
 - Dragonfire Adept/Dragon Shaman ACFs missing gemstone dragons.

Sis'thik
 - Female stats aren't tagged as female.

Crocodilian Brute
 - Barbarian ACF should say what happens if you don't have DR yet.

Gurrash
 - Barbarian ACF says Bakali.

Demarax
 - I'm on the fence if this should have an LA.  I'm leaning towards no, it's pretty interesting.

Marl
 - You need rules text on the variable amount of arms it can have.

Flailer
 - You've got extra spaces again.
 - Flailer Adventures has a line with just the letter A.
 - Ambush Power is Metapsionic, should it require being psionically focused?

Dracon
 - Extra spaces.
 - Foe of the Dark One needs a favored enemy bonus +.
 - Knight ACF Halberd Defense is only half of a sentence.
 - Paladin ACF needs a duration or a limitation.  Right now there's no rules text preventing unlimited weapons.

Gaund
 - Extra spaces again.
 - Frost Gaund, do you mean cold damage with Burning Gaze?  If so, please clarify and also give rules text about the interaction with the Burning Gaze feats.

Kla'a-tah
 - Even more extra spaces.
 - Glutton Killer feat needs a favored enemy bonus +.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #117 on: February 02, 2017, 07:10:55 PM »
I has fixed or altered all (Dragon Shaman/Dragonfire Adept Levels will be getting done elsewhere).  Would a +2 LA be ok for the Chameleon Men?

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #118 on: February 02, 2017, 07:15:45 PM »
On the Chameleon Man I'm honestly not sure what would be appropriate.

Edit: With Frost Gaund please specify that you do cold damage instead of fire with Burning Gaze.  Also, your non-humanoid line for Marl has way too many extra spaces.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #119 on: February 02, 2017, 11:57:16 PM »
It is a full round action to teleport tho