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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #80 on: January 12, 2017, 07:55:01 PM »
Looks good.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #81 on: January 12, 2017, 09:15:23 PM »
i eagerly await youre review of page  5 then  :D

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #82 on: January 13, 2017, 11:30:05 AM »
Rescue Worker (and some other stuff that I forgot to mention and don't remember) doesn't have a sentence about entering the PrC.  Just FYI, not sure if this is a real concern.

Ruhigbar ACFs should be moved out of the Rescue Worker post.

Koalinth ACFs should be moved out of the Shark Rider post.
 - Fighter ACF says you can only pick a Large shark, but the only shark available for a 4th level Ranger is Medium.  Don't limit it to size, just say Shark.  (I'd say the same for all the ACFs that give you a shark.
 - Also, a Paladin can have a Large Shark as a special mount, just fyi.

Norker ACFs should be moved out of the Norker Warror post.

Norker Warrior has Listen as a class skill, give it Spot.

Thoul Warror
 - Has Listen as a class skill, give it spot.
 - Has a typo in Will saves, they're all 1 higher than they should be.
 - Improved Healing needs to state what happens if you've got Regeneration from the Improved Healing feat.

Thoul ACFs should be moved out of the Thoul Warrior post.
 - Also there's no rogue ACF text.

Toad Sticker
 - Bleeder says and instead of an.
 - Veteran, additional die (2d6 instead of 1d6) or goes up a die (1d8 instead of 1d6)?
 - Precision, just say "your attacks ignore concealment, including total concealment as long as you target the correct square."

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #83 on: January 14, 2017, 04:36:35 PM »
I has made modifications, curious to see what you think of thoul

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #84 on: January 14, 2017, 08:20:42 PM »
Koalinth
 - Why the obsession with having to choose a Large Shark when that requires a level 8 character?  (Requires effective druid level 4 and rangers only count 1/2 hd.)

Thoul Rogue ACF
 - .....what?


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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #85 on: January 14, 2017, 08:28:56 PM »
dammit i thought i fixed the shark thingie, it is now revised

thouls are already part ghoul, if a thoul rogue with that ability dies its closer to being undead than normal, so they become undead if killed

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #86 on: January 14, 2017, 08:32:34 PM »
What page is that template on in Libris Mortis?  I'll look at it.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #87 on: January 14, 2017, 11:57:30 PM »
page 104, i need to change name I got the wrong template
« Last Edit: January 14, 2017, 11:59:20 PM by bhu »

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #88 on: January 15, 2017, 01:37:38 PM »
The Gravetouched Ghoul template looks fine, but it should require higher than level 5.  Most prestige classes that grant templates kick in around level 15/16.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #89 on: January 16, 2017, 07:31:01 PM »
I shall rework it whilst you hit page 6.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #90 on: January 16, 2017, 09:05:17 PM »
Page 6

You have two prestige classes called Bleak Archer.  Please rename one.  Also they're very similar.

Batiri
 - Doesn't have ability score adjustments, just a placeholder for them.
 - Also has another placeholder line.

Dinosaur Priest
 - This requires spellcasting but doesn't advance it.
 - Batiri racial sub levels should be in the Batiri thread.
  - Barbarian ACF, Sauropod might end up being an issue.  2/3 size categories larger can have a definite damage impact.

Dino Companions added to index.

Mercenary
 - Has Listen, needs Spot.
 - Ambushin' needs a save calculation, it says what stat to use but not what else gets added.
 - Ambushin has Improved options that don't specify they need the normal version.
 - Chargin' doesn't have a list to choose from.
 - Racial sub levels should be in the Cerilian Goblin post.

Grodd Goblin
 - Skin of the Night feat needs a duration.

Grodd Adept
 - Enhanced Spell List, is this all spells from all lists?  What level do they get added to your spell list at?  I'd suggest restricting it to Cleric or Druid or maybe Cleric and Druid.
 - Grodd Goblin racial sub levels should be in the race post.
   - New Mystery Path says WIP.
   - Tiny Shadow has two stat blocks.

Beastman
 - One Eye and Many Eyes should be restricted from taking both.

Host
 - Again move the ACFs.
 - Also, it looks like this should require the binder ACF.

New Vestiges added to the Index.  I can't balance these, never used Binding.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #91 on: January 17, 2017, 07:45:37 PM »
I has redone, leme know what you think

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #92 on: January 17, 2017, 09:15:46 PM »
Everything seems to look fine.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #93 on: January 17, 2017, 09:30:04 PM »
Yays!

Page 7 should be easy, thers only 5 classes on it i think (the fluff may not all be there but the crunch is)

Bleak Archer is up twice because I had a request to do it and I'd forgotten I'd already done it

I need to pick one or the other

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #94 on: January 17, 2017, 09:46:11 PM »
Yays!

Page 7 should be easy, thers only 5 classes on it i think (the fluff may not all be there but the crunch is)

Bleak Archer is up twice because I had a request to do it and I'd forgotten I'd already done it

I need to pick one or the other

You could make Bleak Archer and Bleak Sniper, Sniper getting all of the range increasing stuff and Archer getting the full attack action capstone?

If you want to go that route let me know and I'll help.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #95 on: January 18, 2017, 02:21:16 AM »
that actuallu sounds kinda nifty!

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #96 on: January 18, 2017, 12:18:08 PM »
Bleak Archer

Gets Arrow of Darkness.
Gets Master Archer capstone.


Bleak Sniper

Gets Shadow Bow.
Gets stealthy stuff.
Gets Highwayman capstone.

Not sure what to adjust past that offhand, I'm barely familiar with mysteries.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #97 on: January 19, 2017, 03:24:12 AM »
made adjustment and finished page 7

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #98 on: January 19, 2017, 11:08:25 AM »
Bleak Sniper
 - Has Spot, give it Listen

I still feel like they need to be differentiated more but I'm not sure how to do that.

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Re: Feedback thread
« Reply #99 on: January 19, 2017, 03:30:23 PM »
Page 7

New stuff added to index.

Champion
 - Improved Daunting Challenge should specify what Willpower save it affects.

Tunnel Haunt
 - Skills have a weird line break, also you didn't list the key stats.
 - Tunnellurker needs either text on what happens if you break the invisibilty or up it to one of the better invisibility spells.

Goblin Diplomat
 - I'm not a fan of the capstone, it expects you to have 5 metamagic feats (2 pre-reqs + 3 extra for the capstone to apply to).

Amitok
 - Loyalty should let you adopt a family or something, right now it's useless for a lone Amitok but it is the pre-req for other feats.

Redeemer
 - Requires Versatility which is the capstone for Goblin Diplomat.  ?????