...At this point, I'm tempted to reword the entire setup to be mechanically equal, but much cleaner by using
tables. Which save
so much wording trouble.
It wouldn't be the first time I was peeved enough by the wording of a homebrew to reword most of the thing. Granted, I'm pretty sure that was a hot garbage fire of a class concept to begin with, due to the sheer number of attacks available making deletion of single targets far too easy, but I was actually thinking about how to fix the monstrosity's damage output and make significant room for archetypes on top of that. I guess that'll be the next thing I do on this thread, possibly followed by fixing the mess of wording in the metals. If I can figure out what the hell the effects are from that wording...
The big thing is that the wording is bloated and confusing enough that, as I dig into it and puzzle it out, I'm finding more and more of my complaints aren't valid. After checking half-a-dozen times to be sure I understand the mechanics correctly. I'm
still not sure how the heck the costs and crafting time work because of how poor the wording is. Like, I'm confused enough by the poor wording(more the issues with focusing on specific parts of the bloated blocks of text that abound in the description) that I can't figure out which of these two tables is the way it actually "works."
Quality | Total Craft Time | Total Craft Cost |
Masterwork | 24 hours | 1,000 GP |
Relicwork | 72 hours | 3,500 GP |
Artifactwork | 216 hours | 35,000 GP |
Phantasmwork | 512 hours | 70,000 GP |
Quality | Total Craft Time | Total Craft Cost |
Masterwork | 24 hours | 1,000 GP |
Relicwork | 96 hours | 4,500 GP |
Artifactwork | 312 hours | 39,500 GP |
Phantasmwork | 824 hours | 109,500 GP |
The confusion is caused by these lines:
Those upgrades may be done to already existing Pure Metal items, and each of them further doubles the item's HP.
If the crafter has at least 12 ranks in Craft(Weaponsmithing), they can make it Relicwork for an extra 3500 GP worth of materials and 72 hour of work.
The bolded part is the part of the repeated line that is making me wonder if it is iterative increases, like the second table, and it's three words of the line. This confusion wouldn't happen if it was a table, like I showed, or if the specified cost was the total and the first quote specified that you payed and worked the difference.
I'm
really tempted to pull a piece-by-piece rewording like I did in the linked thread, just so that I can be sure I don't miss anything. Granted, in that thread, I largely abandoned the attempt due to how long it was taking. Here, I can at least take it one part at a time. Base system, then the materials one-at-a-time, then the feats, using the material rewording/critique posts as a reference to judge interactions between mixed materials.